Essay -(First One)
The author shows that pride was always first when it came to the narrator and too much pride can never be a good ending.
Day by day pride got in the way of the care for his brother. In the “Scarlet Ibis” by James Hurst, William was born different. His brother however wasn't and didn't like the fact that his brother was handicap. In this story his goal is to teach him how to be a normal boy, who can walk. Still never letting pride get in the way.
The narrator never let his pride get in the way and even when he felt ashamed to have a brother who couldn't walk. For example “Mama, he smiled. He’s all there! He’s all there!” This shows that he didn't have much effort in caring for his brother until he saw something in him. Proving he didn't want to care unless he was proven human. This also shows he didn't want to give anymore effort without losing his pride along the way. Not wanting to be told he couldn't be a real brother like he wanted. In addition when the narrator explains “When Doodle was five years old, I was embarrassed having a brother of that age who couldn't walk.”
This shows he was ashamed to know his brother couldn't walk and be sure to do anything he could to make his brother the way he wanted fixing his pride. This also shows he would do anything to make his brother walk and not care if it affect his health or if the doctors just said he couldn't walk. Pride came first in the narrator eyes also being ashamed was something throughout the story he would fix without seeing the consequences.
Through out my critiques on this essay I found I deserve getting a low grade. An example is not putting page numbers on my quotes, not using the outline given to me and I would like to change my structure. Some goals I want to set for myself are doing an outline first, also writing down some quotes and putting the author last name and page number.
What have you learned this semester?
This semester I learned that writing is much more about planning before typing, as well as knowing what is you want to write about. Something I would say that has improved about myself is knowing there must be a plan before writing or the process will be slower and all over the place. To me writing is an escape and what I know needs work is following the rules and making sure I do what is asked for a formal essay. I also want to improve in grammar and being able to write in the best way I can. In writing I also feel like its not my best, like theres is something to fix. I want to change that by getting critique from others, making sure its my best work. Goals I set for writing are following the steps to make a good essay and making a plan for myself. As well as embedded quotes that fit in with my formal essays. The way I want to work on my goals is saving my essays and seeing on what I could improve on and what mistakes I seem to always make. There is so much that I've learned and things like this I want to take into 10th grade.
Day by day pride got in the way of the care for his brother. In the “Scarlet Ibis” by James Hurst, William was born different. His brother however wasn't and didn't like the fact that his brother was handicap. In this story his goal is to teach him how to be a normal boy, who can walk. Still never letting pride get in the way.
The narrator never let his pride get in the way and even when he felt ashamed to have a brother who couldn't walk. For example “Mama, he smiled. He’s all there! He’s all there!” This shows that he didn't have much effort in caring for his brother until he saw something in him. Proving he didn't want to care unless he was proven human. This also shows he didn't want to give anymore effort without losing his pride along the way. Not wanting to be told he couldn't be a real brother like he wanted. In addition when the narrator explains “When Doodle was five years old, I was embarrassed having a brother of that age who couldn't walk.”
This shows he was ashamed to know his brother couldn't walk and be sure to do anything he could to make his brother the way he wanted fixing his pride. This also shows he would do anything to make his brother walk and not care if it affect his health or if the doctors just said he couldn't walk. Pride came first in the narrator eyes also being ashamed was something throughout the story he would fix without seeing the consequences.
Through out my critiques on this essay I found I deserve getting a low grade. An example is not putting page numbers on my quotes, not using the outline given to me and I would like to change my structure. Some goals I want to set for myself are doing an outline first, also writing down some quotes and putting the author last name and page number.
What have you learned this semester?
This semester I learned that writing is much more about planning before typing, as well as knowing what is you want to write about. Something I would say that has improved about myself is knowing there must be a plan before writing or the process will be slower and all over the place. To me writing is an escape and what I know needs work is following the rules and making sure I do what is asked for a formal essay. I also want to improve in grammar and being able to write in the best way I can. In writing I also feel like its not my best, like theres is something to fix. I want to change that by getting critique from others, making sure its my best work. Goals I set for writing are following the steps to make a good essay and making a plan for myself. As well as embedded quotes that fit in with my formal essays. The way I want to work on my goals is saving my essays and seeing on what I could improve on and what mistakes I seem to always make. There is so much that I've learned and things like this I want to take into 10th grade.